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The Lost Pianist

Tears reminisce mahogany boxed memories,
Of ecstatic crescendos and tearful diminuendos.
For deep in eternal sadness lies the lost pianist,
Who once dreamt of glorious symphonies.

As he caresses the goddess of the piano,
She moans of rhythmic joy and pleasure,
Executing works that rival the Siren's song,
Echoing the lost voices of her past masters.

But in time's command, their hearts went astray.
Each lying in their own pool of heartfelt miseries.
While he walks asunder, away from melodic Eden,
She beckons to him, yearning to be loved.

Her sorrowful notes whisper his name,
When he contemplates sweet nostalgia.
They swore to eternity to unite in bliss.
A promise that surpasses a mere forevermore.
One thing I noticed about my last three poems is that I don't write something that's personal to me or what's within myself. The themes are usually based on fantasy or have general themes. So from that point I decided to change that and thus this was made.

This piece is, in a way, very personal and abstract in a way. Because I placed myself in the poem and the substance is very real. In here I am The Lost Pianist. It's just a simple poem but emphatic in its own right...

Inspiration: Basically when I was still around 6-7 years I was already learning how to play the piano. I learned basic pieces to once made by famous pianists like Beethoven and Brahms, just to name a few. But as I grew I became uninterested and I stopped playing. It's been 8 years since I've played the piano and I feel like playing again.

Out of the saddest poems I've made this one takes it...

Some songs I listened to...

"About Today" - The National
"Sirena" - Gloc - 9 (This is one is Original Pinoy Music)
"The Day You Said Goodnight" - Hale (Another OPM)

Poem (c) Me

Comments and Constructive Criticism are welcome

It was featured in #Daily-Lit-Deviations
on November 21,2012

    Daily Lit Deviations for November 21,2012


I consider this my first and HIGHEST achievement so far...

It was also a Daily Deviation on January 6,2013...


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Given 2013-01-06
The Lost Pianist by ~Shadow-Fox168 resonates with a sad but beautiful atmosphere. ( Suggested by xTintedlullabyx and Featured by thorns )
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Kl0cw3rk Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013  Student Artist
Amazing and powerful stuff, thanks for being such an awesome writer!
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McKinleyWiens Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Student Writer
Howdy!
My name is McKinley Wiens, and I've just recently started a blog based around literature, and one of the ideas I had was to post 1 piece of literature a day that I have found online and I quite love, accompanied by a short review and maybe a comment from the author! Would you by chance be willing to allow me to post a link to this page, and write my opinions on the piece on my blog, linking of course also to your DA page?
If not, no worries! If you are willing, I would love if you could also answer some or all of the answers below for me, to work into the blog post??

1. What inspired you to write the piece?
2. What does the piece mean to you?
3. How has literature as a whole, or literature communities on sites such as DevArt, affected your life?
4. Favorite novel?
5. Anything else you feel is relevant, and would like to have included in the post!

Thank you so much!!

If you allow me to use and link your piece I will tell you as soon as it is included into the blog!
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013
Sure thing, and I decided to answer your questions... here they are

1. Aside from changing directions in theme, I was also inspired by some music and mostly piano music because I miss playing those kinds of music.

2. The piece, in a way, helps get back to what I love to do. And perhaps make something out of it... :)

3. The literature community helped me a lot. They write about ideas that are not being touched yet and some just like to express themselves and what they love. I makes me want to step up and prove that I can write pieces too.

4. My favorite novel... The Divine Comedy by Dante Alighieri and Sidney Sheldon novels.

5. I'm not sure... at least I'll enjoy the post when I see it... :)

Thank you very much for the comment! It means a lot!!
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McKinleyWiens Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you very kindly! The post will be up in the next couple days, I'll be sure to message you when it is! And, if possible, when it does go up I'd love if you announced it in a journal post or something! (but ya don't have to!)
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Photographyandnature Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2013  Student Photographer
I liked the language you used in this piece. It takes me back to past English classes of greek mythology and Shakespeare. Good job!
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Wow thanks, and I had Shakespeare during my junior year and we just had Greek Myth... I learn a lot of things from them.
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Photographyandnature Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Student Photographer
Your welcome. That's a good thing. We still read them today for a reason.
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Van-Dunkelschreiber Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I sorry this is late but I only just found out but CONGADULATION :icondogdanceplz:
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Thanks!
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Van-Dunkelschreiber Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you r welcome
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Cairngorm77 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
beautiful.
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Thank you!
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Canis44 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student Writer
I really like how you were able to create such a vivid relationship between the pianist, and the instrument. :)
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
This poem was spontaneous... I decided to put my emotion in it! Thank you
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TheRollingScones Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so beautiful :iconcryforeverplz:
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Thank you!
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Clashe Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
I know that feeling man... :huggle: I've been playing piano for around 12 years now and in the middle stopped for a while, partially because I was frustrated that I wasn't making enough progress and my parents were very hard on me for that fact. Writing helped me get over that insecurity and shame to some extent so that I've started playing again... Don't be afraid to start up again....yes, you may be disappointed in your abilities initially, but in my opinion the struggle of relearning old skills is less painful then waiting and yearning for what has already been lost
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
I know... one day I promise to play again.
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ValleyGirl13 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful. It took my breath away. It sounds almost like a ballad. Thank you.
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
You're welcome and I'm glad you enjoyed it...
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ValleyGirl13 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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SyrinaKorramaya Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow...I can relate to this poem so, so much.
First of all, I've been teaching myself how to play the piano (by ear-I don't know how to read sheet music) since I was 2 years old. My name is Syrina (like Sirena/Serena, spelled differently), and I was named after a Siren. And this poem...it's like putting the deepest part of my soul into words. It's just really amazing how much I can feel to this.
Wonderful work. You definitely deserved the 'Daily Deviation' award.
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Thank you, and from what I read in your comment, you're really talented!
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SyrinaKorramaya Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are very, very welcome. ^^
Oh, thank you! Reading your compliment makes me blush! :iconblushingplz:
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PaperSkys Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Right in the Feels.
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
I know right?
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mangaluver1231 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is such a beautiful poem!
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Thank you!
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mangaluver1231 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome :)
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Axleman290 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
This is a cool link!
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Axleman290 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Yarh
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PamFreak101 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
OMG, this is so beautiful! Love the all the imagery!
All the words seem just right! :D So amazing!
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Thank you!
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Narcaholic Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Student
Beautiful! (:
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
I'm glad you enjoyed reading it!
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Peanut111 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
Really beautiful.
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Thank you!
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Neneeiscool Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
Wow that was deep!
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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CrumbledWings Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
i love variety between descriptions and very nice poem you deserve the DD :D
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Thank you, it was surprising!!
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WolfOfTheAngels Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is what happened to me, and I'm going to start taking piano lessons again this year. But since I stopped playing the piano, I've forgotten how to read music. I hope I'll learn to read it again.
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
I hope you do and thanks for the comment!
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WolfOfTheAngels Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem!! I really loved the poem!
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DanceWannabe Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i used to play the piano when I was younger, but then I was too young to appreciate it and quit =c I wish I hadn't and followed it through, because I'm going through the same thing now. Good luck! ^-^
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
I know how you feel, but I promised myself to play again!
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GoldenGirl954 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013
Such a beautiful poem :rose:
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Shadow-Fox168 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013
Thank you for the comment! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Zee-Who Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2013  Hobbyist
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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